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Diamonds in the Rough
Sniperocker123
Twilight
Summary: "Bella, I'm a vampire." "Um, yea, okay. Uh, good for you. Anything else?" "I love you." "That's better. I thought you'd never say the words. You know as old and experienced as you are, you can be pretty slow." AU/Non-Canon.
Rated M
Chapter 1
Bella is at some kind of party, for herself mind you, and is chugging beer. Somehow I don’t see this as a good idea, but then I don’t know Bella in this story and it says it’s non-canon so I imagine she can handle it.
Belly-Bean is a clever nickname. Ten points for creativity.
I KNEW it would be a bad idea! Belly-Bean is going to have to live off of aspirin today.
I think Bella is multiple-personalities. Awesome.
On our way to Forks!
Chapter 2
It’s cute that Bella still calls her dad daddy. I do that too sometimes, but not nearly as often as I did when I was younger.
I like this Bella, she’s so different.
Haha! I shouldn’t be laughing about Bella calling herself a delusional retard, but it’s not ‘retard’ that makes me laugh, it’s her other personality talking trash at her.
Ha! Charlie has a stalker! This chapter just keeps getting better and better!
Bella sounds quite spoiled, I wonder how this is going to play out.
Whoa, Bella CAN’T cook? Didn’t see that coming!
How did he get your car there? He’s got money, Bella! Duh!
Kim Kardashian? Haha too good.
So cocky!
It’s a little bit weird that only a short time before she was talking about being straight, but she wants to touch Alice’s butt. But her personality is so funny that I can’t help but laugh.
Oh Edward…
Chapter 3
Poor Mike…
Bella is so crazy! She’s confident and cocky and hilarious! I freakin’ LOVE your Bella!!!
Just curious when Bella learned their names.
I like her split personality, it’s great.
Why did Bella offer to help when she openly admitted she can’t cook?
Ha! Taco Bella! I’m going to hire you to make up nicknames for me!
Bella’s a vegetarian? I thought she was eating meat last chapter?
Oh we’re going to hear about Bella’s mom!
Oh wait, no we’re not. Damn it!
Lisa’s back!
Chapter 4
Is Lisa a lesbian?
Nope, I guess not.
Bella is clearly holding in a ton of pain that will sooner than later drive her crazy. She should let go of it, trust someone with her pain so that she can take back control of her life.
Oh of course Edward’s there.
I feel like Bella and Edward are going to get drunk and end up together…
Hmmm I wonder what Nellie knows that Bella doesn’t.
Chapter 5
Lisa left so soon! And we still don’t know what officially happened to Bella’s mom!
And Charlie’s sick, and Billy’s going to take care of him while Bella’s at school.
Are Edward and Bella dating now? I’m seriously confused.
Ms. Cope is still funny.
I don’t understand what’s going on…
Okay, I think I sort of understand.
To be honest, the story started out great. There was enough mystery to keep going and keep interest, but as it went on it got soooo confusing. We’re five chapters in and STILL don’t know what happened with Bella’s mom. I’m assuming she’s dead, since ‘was’ was used when speaking about her, but how did she die? Things started to get rushed, too. One minute Bella and Edward are just talking and the next they’re dating? Or sort of dating? Maybe it’s just me, but I’m really starting to have a hard time keeping up.
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