Choices, Change and Challenges (1-6)

Choices, Change and Challenges (chapters 1-6)

Chronicles of Narnia

DustLight126

Summary: Anna O'Brien is your average teenage girl with a love for the fictional realm of Narnia. But after a deadly encounter with a street gang sends her to her beloved world, she soon finds she has a greater part to play in the story than she could ever have imagined. Now she must help defend the world she has come to call home. And what of a certain soon to be King? Peter/OC

 

It has honestly been forever and a half since I saw CoN and I can assure you I’ve never read the books (if I like a movie, I can’t read the book because I know the movie will be complete crap compared to the book). So, this review might be a little bit random.

Anna is a gymnist! This excites me! I love gymnastics, it’s always so interesting to watch. Figure skating too. And cheerleading (I was a cheerleader). But I really do love gymnastics. As we progress through the first chapter, we learn that schoolwork has basically taken a backseat to gymnastics. Anybody involved in a sport definitely knows what that’s like.

You have great imagery in here. I love it. But having Bradley call her ‘little girl’ honestly makes me feel like he’s a creepy pedophile.

“Shut it, David, little girls should learn to respect their elders.” I love cocky people. They’re so funny and stupid.

‘I wasn’t even remotely interested in him anymore.’ This is a little confusing. Was she interested in him in the first place? Explain this interest. Besides the fear, was she interested in the things he was saying or planning on doing to her? Am I reading this wrong, or reading too far into it?

Holy shit! I definitely did not expect him to stab her! I thought maybe he’d beat her up or something, maybe rape her, but stab her? Wow.

Moment: I love Aslan. That is all.

That sucks. She died in people world at the hands of a monster. I wonder what’s going to happen to Bradley now? Is he going to be caught? Will we find out any of this throughout the story?

Okay, I’m confused again. Is this set IN the book or is it set in real life?

I really don’t know who would choose being dead in real life over living in Narnia. Is that really a choice?

Okay, so I guess it’s in the book AND in real life? I’m hoping I can keep up with this.

Okay, I love your choices for ‘said’. I really feel it’s important to use better descriptive words than ‘said’, ‘yelled’, ‘groaned’.

 

I love Lucy! Oh hey, that’s funny. And the Beavers are classic.

Oh look, a twist! THREE daughters of Eve? Very interesting. But Anna’s really going to blow her cover here if she’s not careful.

And she blew it. You weren’t supposed to talk about the book!

Stubborn, stubborn Peter. Don’t be so uptight, yo. You should honestly ask Anna how the book works so you can save yourself a lot of trouble. She’s a big blabbermouth, after all.

See, Anna. This is why you don’t tell them about the book. Now everything is going to be your fault. And you know Peter’s a stubborn buttface haha just kidding, he’s not. But to you he is.

 

I have a feeling they’re being hunted. That’s interesting. How did I not see this coming? Oh right, because it’s been forever and a half….

Alright, maybe I’m wrong but I really think the youngest should have gone first. But maybe not. Not sure what your mindset was there, so I won’t question it too much.

I see a hint of Peter/Anna romance here ;)

Just kiss and make up already. You know you love each other.

Awww. So sad. Why you gotta hurt the badger?

Peter, Peter the almighty leader. I feel really bad for Anna. It really must suck knowing what’s going to happen and when it’s going to happen.

Is Anna honestly that oblivious? How do his sisters see it and everyone else but not Anna?

“I wish I could say their bark was worse than their bite.” haha that’s awesome.

“Worst day of the year.” Lol I love this.

I never understood how humans could fit in a beaver or badger home. Maybe I just don’t believe in the magic of it all.

Yes, I LOVE all the questions in chapter 3 that I was asking from chapter 1! I do believe I will find out the answers to these questions!

Anna and Peter sitting in a tree….

Ohhh Bradley’s dad is an officer. Was this mentioned before and I missed it? That explains quite a bit. But is it enough to get him off for murder?

Kiss? Kiss! NO PETER! DAMN YOU!

 

I see Peter as the dad, Anna as the mom and Lucy as the baby J so cute

Alright Anna, let’s have a heart to heart. Even if you went back to the real world, you are dead. There is no more training, no more friends, no more mom. You’d esentially be a shell in the ground and you would likely end up in Heaven or whatever assuming you believe in that stuff. You would likely not be able to go back with Peter, Susan, Lucy and Ed. You’d either exist in Narnia, or not exist at all.

I like the relationship they’re all building. It’s very interesting to watch. It’s even more interesting seeing as Anna knows everything that’s going to happen and the others are oblivious. It surprises me that they’re not nagging her as much as I expected them too. If I was preparing for war or whatever and a person with me knew what was going to happen I would be begging to know.

Wait….would her phone work in Narnia? That would be an interesting turn of events. She’s supposed to be dead, but she can text or call her family back home from her phone…that would definitely freak me out.

No. More. Ice.

 

Ohhh the ice thing makes sense now. Duh.

Okay guys, a beaver isn’t going to weigh nearly as much as a human. I really should go rent this movie and watch it again so I can stop sounding like an idiot lol.

Sneaky little wolves huh?

You have a feeling, Anna? Don’t be so sassy. Keep your knowledge to yourself.

No more hugging or talking. Go kiss and be all lovey now. I demand it! I know Peter wants you, Anna. Don’t deny it. Don’t. Deny. It.

Alright, sweetie. Make sure you’re seperating your dialogue when it’s several people talking. For the most part it’s easy to follow, but sometimes, like in chapter five at the camp, it gets more difficult.

I sort of picture Anna played by Jennifer Lawrence with dark hair. Is that weird? Maybe it’s because of her being in The Hunger Games.

Way to go, Anna! You get to be the witch butt-kicker!

So a guardian is kind of like a fanfiction writer. When the original writer of the book/movie/show/whatever screws it up for us, we get to take the reigns and make it right again. This is especially true in my fandom: iCarly. Our ending was pathetic, we didn’t like it. I think the only thing we have agreed on, no matter what ship, is that the end product of such a great series was just a terrible, horrible, nasty thing. Also, us Seddie shippers were very disappointed. But in the fanfiction world we can pull the characters back where they belong and continue a story line that fits who they were in the first place and not what they became. So even if the writer of the originial work wants a change and is tired of how things are, we can keep the characters we love right where they belong and continue the story line the way it should be.

Let the training begin!

 

Anna’s life was stolen from her and she doesn’t want to take a life. It’s very…I don’t know the word. But it’s clever, even if that doesn’t make sense.

Don’t screw this up, Anna. Stick to the plan. You HAVE to fight the witch to keep the story you love intact.

DAMN IT! I can honestly tell you I was leaning toward the computer screen going ‘do it, do it already. Come on, stop stalling! Just kiss each other!’

Again, Peter and Anna sitting in a tree, apparantely never k-i-s-s-i-n-g.

Wolves suck. Big time.

Alright, I’m really excited about the next half of the story, but I have to keep things balanced and fair so I won’t be getting to that for a little bit. Regardless of my lack of memory, I still find this enjoyable and exciting. I can’t wait to see what happens when Anna has to face the witch.

You’ve done a nice job here, so far. My only suggestion to you, as I mentioned before, is that you keep your dialogue seperated. It does start to get confusing at chapter five.

No rating until the end of the story.