I Won't Give Up

I Won’t Give Up

Twilight

WolfGirl1335

Summary:  Jake gets shot, Nessie rushes to his side in the hospital. She flashes back to when they first met. They are both dating other people at the time. After pretty bad breakups for both of them, it brings Jake and Nessie closer. Neither one will give up their happiness

Straight away this fic catches my interest simply because of the title. I Won’t Give Up is one of my favorite songs. This author doesn’t beat around the bush and the first paragraph really sets the stage for the rest of the story. There is no random chattering that doesn’t pertain to what’s going on. I got nervous reading the first paragraph (let’s face it…nobody wants us to think of Taylor Lautner…I mean Jake…dying).

One of my favorite moments after this first paragraph is when Nessie, Sam, Paul and Jared are waiting in the hospital and the doctor approaches. First, picture Nessie standing with these three men. Now imagine them introducing themselves. Sergeant, detective, officer, wife. I laughed a little bit imagining these powerful people with Nessie.

We learn that Jake is okay (for the time being) and he is being brought into a room. I assume he’s in the ICU because only one person is allowed to go in by him at a time. Of course, Nessie goes in and as she’s sitting with him, finally giving into her stress and fear, she remembers when they met. Get ready for lots of cuteness!

Think: Princess Nessie. The whole following scene is almost like a fairy tale. Jake and Nessie meet at the Cadet Academy Ball where Jake is with his girlfriend, Madison, and Nessie is with her boyfriend, Adam. But wait…this is NOT a love at first sight moment! This makes it SO MUCH better. The only thing that confuses me a slight bit is when Jake says she’s beautiful and Adam tells her Jake thinks he’s a comedian. I’m not sure if this is supposed to be insulting or not. Nessie laughs, though, so I’m assuming all is good.

This is where things start getting a little mixed up. Everything seems to be moving by so fast and I don’t really get a glimpse into other occasions (like the academy graduation), but that could easily be because nothing big happened that would add to the story. I would have loved to see more from the fight that broke Nessie and Adam up instead of a conversation leading to a mutual agreement, but I don’t get a good read of Nessie in either the book or the movie, so she could very well be a level headed girl who doesn’t fight.

Second favorite part: Edward calling her Loch Ness. I can just see Bella rolling her eyes at this.

Madison cheats on Jake (what?! Really?! Eff you, Madison!). Drunk Jake always makes me happy (and also reminds me of the parody video by Hillywood). It’s really nice to see Jake and Nessie taking things slow all while Jake treats her like a princess and takes her out in limos. Is anybody else jealous of this? I am (just a little bit).

‘"I love you too Jacob Black. I won't give up on us," I promise’ even though I’m not a sappy (romantic) person I really love this line. It just lit up my heart.

My heart just BROKE when they lost their first baby girl! But realistically, she would have been much bigger than 2 pounds at Nessie’s 7 month check-up. Not such a big deal, I just know this because I have a niece and I live with my sister so I know A LOT more about baby-ness than I did before.

Guaran-fucking-tee. Love it. Breaking up a word to add a swear word is always a good thing with me.  

I love when Jake’s going to be a daddy, but he already is one to baby girl number one (Hope Elizabeth! Shoutout!). I love that it just happens like BAM! I wasn’t expecting it. Then again, I wasn’t expecting a lot of things that happened in the story. That’s the best…being kept on your toes. It makes it exciting. Although I believe he would be in the hospital much longer (and be on bed rest much longer as well) I’m not too bothered by it because I’m still excited about the second baby.

I LOVE that they name their second after her mother. It really ties everything together. It’s also great knowing that they’re happy and together and doing well. The ending felt a little bit rushed and I would have loved to see this as a multi-chapter. It works as a oneshot, but I would have loved to read a little bit more detail on some things. Regardless I enjoyed this oneshot.

Rating: 3/5

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